Wednesday, February 26, 2014

500 Word Fiction Short Story !

                   I Remember getting a phone call from Jake that he planned a vacation for all  of us Me,  Jenny . Matt and of course Brad and Ally .  We was getting ready to  go  and just  couldn’t believe we was all going on a big trip he said he had everything planned for a while .for all of us to  all be together for the last summer because of jenny moving to  Texas and matt was getting married and moving too . This was the last summer we was all going to be together for the last time . It was going to be a summer to remember I packed all my things and drove to  Jake’s house and seen everyone there and just knowing that im not gonna see them no more was hurting me they  were my bestfriends and I knew we all had to  make sure jenny and matt had there best  vacation ever so we started getting our things and putting it in the RV and  finally driving off jake didn’t tell us where we was going he said it was a “surprise” for all of us I just kept thinking were he is going the entire time he said “ calm  down” I was over thinking if I wanted to go  to this trip but I couldn’t say  take me back  it was matt and jenny last day at Kansas with  us im  not going to  leave them and stay home I  just  went along with  it . Hours Passed and we was still .driving I went to  look out the window and we was in the middle of no where jake probably didn’t know were he went we drove for hours and hours without a brake I remember telling him  to pull over and see if he seen a near by gas station or somebody to  help  us find were he was suppose to  go  but he didn’t listen instead he drove and faster and faster without stopping .  I asked why he didn’t say  anything to  us? Why  is he so  jumpy about everything? It was something weird that  I  couldn’t put my finger on but I knew jake was acting weird about it . I was getting worried I wanted to  get  up  and ask  him  but I  couldn’t I just thought maybe he found hes way  were he wanted to  go  me and jenn got even more worried because he wasn’t acting as usual  like if something was inside him telling him stuff .  Matt was talking to  jake but he wouldn’t say  a word he just stared at him  and shook hes head he said “ something is wrong with  him “ all I can remember was he drove and I  still  remember the car falling on a edge and the car kept rolling and rolling and we was all  screaming of fear and I was the only one to  survive in the crash 

1 comment:

  1. Wooow. I wanna know what was wrong with him! Great psychologically scary story involving close friends. The end of summer, end of life thing is nice. We're going to work on punctuation and grammar and stuff. In the end, a great story like this can be tough to understand if grammar, punctuation, and usage isn't stable. That's little stuff, though, and I'm here to help with that (pretty good at it, too)! You keep coming up with fabulous, creative ideas and we'll work together on the other stuff. Great stuff, Aslin!
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